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PostSubject: Story of Commander Dietz   Sat Oct 10, 2009 2:47 pm

Prologue

A long time ago on a planet named Galexyfie, Two empires fight for control of Galexyfie and the Universe.................



Dietz: LOOK OUT INCOMING MISSLES! BOOM! BOOM! BOOM! BOOM!

Marine: Sir they’re coming in through the left flank!

Dietz: That’s the least of our problems.

Suddenly a giant mecha comes from the sky and shoots everywhere …

HIGH COMMAND: Commander Dietz I strongly recommend retreating.

Dietz: Agreed; OK EVERYONE TIME TO FALL BACK!

Marine: Meta Commander Dan isn’t going to like this.

Dietz: He never does………



Here is some background info: Galexyfie is as big as the sun and has one city and four suburbs that make up 1/5th of the planet. the 2 sides in this war are the anti-muti-formers (bad) and the multi-formers (good).








Chapter 1
HIGH COMMAND


High command is the most sophisticated structure on the planet and home of the leader of the multi-formers, Commander Dan.

Dietz blocks out it all, his main objective is to speak with Commander Dan - he puts his hand on the scanner. Computer security code bypassed. The doors open swiftly as if to hurry him along and Dietz enters the inner sanctum of the entire operation; the room is bright white with 4 blue flashing symbols that only commander Dan understands.

Suddenly Dan speaks: What are they trying to do capture the city or destroy it?

Dietz: I don’t know sir but I saw them bring in nukes on a recon mission sir.

Dan: either way we are going to retake Kronos.

Dietz: yes sir!

Dan: ok see Captain Charles on your way out.

Dietz: yes sir Commander.

Charles: General. Dietz here is your assignment good luck.

Dietz: thanks good night.

3 hours later..........

Dietz: ugh I’m finally here well time to go to bed good night platoon.

Marines: GOOD NIGHT SIR!

Ch2 battle for kronos

5:15 am

Dietz wakes up and get everyone up

7:00 am ship out

Dietz: this is squad alpha we r inserting from the south

chopper squad pilot: roger that, before we can land we need u to take out the southern flak guns in the city.

Dietz: under stood Dietz out


Dietz: ok platoon we to destroy the flak guns on our way in bravo squad u take this building, delta and I will take that one

platoon: yes sir!

As we move up I hear miniguns star to fire I know the fire will be to intense to go through so I phone the tank commander

Dietz: we need u to take out the miniguns in the buildings

tank commander yes sir!

I hear tanks shooting all at once then the minigun fire stops

Dietz: move and kill the flak guns

marines: yes sir!

My squad and I go through the building at lighting speed and soon get to the flak gun I open a trapdoor and get shot in the arm.

Dietz: ARGHHHHHHHH!

I quickly shut the door and hatch an idea to plant c4 under the flak gun I quickly plant c4 and get everyone out of the building and pull the trigger. BOOM! The entire building implodes i here
choppers coming I they set down and unload then I here a familiar voice

Dan: ok every one now we push to the center of the city lets go!

Dietz: since when does u fight with us?

Dan: now.


we fight furiously to get to the center of the city when we get we link up with the others the fire is intense for hours then it suddenly stops we here this dull roar that’s getting louder with every minute we look up


marine: there sending a planet to us !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Then we here chopper

HIGH COMMAND: get your buts on the choppers now!

We all get on the choppers and get out but it’s to late only half way through the city the planet whacks us the shock wave hits the chopper and I blackout......................... to be continued


Ch 3 recovery

3 weeks later...........

Dietz: argh what happened?

Dan: you've been in a coma and a lot has happened since kronos

Dietz: like what?

Dan: well flintask has fallen and--

Dietz: and the battlefield?

Dan: we don't know what happened to it we can only assume the worst

Dietz: NOOOO!!!!! , they can't be dead!

Dan: I’m afraid they are.

Dan: this war has escalated out of control we only have one option left.

Dietz: no! We will not activate protocol alpha 64231

Dan: of course not I will fight in high command to keep this from happening but we are losing!

Dan: get some rest I will brief you some more in the morning .oora?

Dietz: oora.

Ch 4 finding a new world

6 years later..... Aboard multiformer's flag ship the Archimedes

Dan: alright this is where alpha 6432 activates!

Dan: oora?

Marines: OORA!

Dan: alright contact the fleet admirals to keep the anti's ships off of us

ensign: yes sir!

Dan: attention all multiformer’s deemed masters get to the main canon now!

Dietz: well this is it good bye galexyfie * sniff *

Dan: ok let’s do this!

I summoned up my strength and fired with everything I had then there was a large boom and the ship rocked from side to side

Dan: get us out of here the planet is going hypercrital!

We jetted out at full speed with the remaining ships from the fight, if you have ever seen your home world explode into billions of peaces you know what I felt but if you haven't you could never imagine what it feels like. The next few days we searched the outer colonies for a home but the only one inhabitable was the battlefield we found its remains on the planet tetram.

Dietz: I had a feeling we would end up here

Dan: good because we have a lot of work to do
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PostSubject: Re: Story of Commander Dietz   Thu Oct 15, 2009 10:11 am

ch 5 new enemies

3 weeks after the galexyfue incedint...........

dietz : sir all systems are finally operational

dan: good now we can-

WARP EXPLOSION

dietz : what the heck was that?!


HIGH COMMAND: incoming hostiles!

dan: what are they?

HIGH COMMMAND: the humans call them the dredge

dan: roger that , ALL UNITS OPEN FIRE!

dietz: this is gonna be a long day.

TO BE CONTINUED!
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PostSubject: Re: Story of Commander Dietz   Fri Oct 16, 2009 9:46 am

ch 6 the first struggle..................... and new allies

dietz: we need fighters in the air now !

flight officer: we don't have any!

dietz: then what do we do , sit here until they kill us?!

flight officer: well we could do-

EXPLOSION WITH ARIVAL OF UNKNOWNS

marine: what the heck are those things?!

dietz: wait a sec , HOLD YOUR FIRE!

Flight officer: there repeling the enemy, OORA!


later............

dan: we thank your race for defending us , but we have no medals

???: thae neda dos crata

Translator: thats ok we happy to serve and by the way we are the turcorise.

dan: you are hearby declared allies of the battle field!

Turcorise: thant chata!

Translator : OORA!
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PostSubject: Re: Story of Commander Dietz   Sat Oct 17, 2009 6:11 pm

ch 7 begining of orange block*

6 days later

battle field HIGH COMMAND

dan: dietz u r assighned to orange block

dietz: what's that?

dan: an elite force of commandos that defends the most presios of " the artifacts"

dietz: ok i accept

dan: your men are on the surface

dietz: ok


later


dietz : ALRIGHT I'M YOUR CO IF ANY HAS ANY OBJECTIONS STEP FOWARD

marines: NO SIR!

deitz: alright suit up it's gonna be a long day.

marines: OORA!

dietz: oora.



* the tales of dietz with orange block will be told else where


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PostSubject: Re: Story of Commander Dietz   Sat Oct 17, 2009 7:54 pm

short chapters but great story
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PostSubject: Re: Story of Commander Dietz   Sun Oct 18, 2009 9:41 am

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PostSubject: Re: Story of Commander Dietz   Wed Oct 21, 2009 9:53 pm

when are you making more?
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PostSubject: Re: Story of Commander Dietz   Thu Oct 22, 2009 8:39 pm

CH 8 END OF ORANGE BLOCK

many eons later on the planet Pegisi Delphi 4

right after drop

dietz: ALRIGHT TROOPERS THIS IS WHERE THE REMEMNANTS OF THE STUPIDS CALLED THE COVANANT GETS THERE BUT KICKED FOR THE FINAL TIME! MOUNT UP WE HAVE A JOB TO DO!

ODSTs: yes sir!

We get in the hogs and tanks and precede to a vital multiformer signal tower


SLIP SPACE RUPTURE

dietz: (muttering) crap it's an entire fleet!

we arrive at the signal tower and set up defenses

we are preparing for a covenant assault but the next thing that happened no one was prepared for suddenly a weird but familiar ship warps in and blows up the covenant we are rejoicing then it's speakers come on and I am filled with rage

???: hello puny peoples I am here to make sure you all die!

Dietz: STIVELAND!

Stiveland: well hello dietz, time to meet your death!


Dan: no!

DAN FIRES A BEAM OF MULTIFORMER ENERGY AND DESTROYS MOST OF THE SHIP


stiveland: dang it Dan if I can't kill you I’ll kill your friends

stiveland destroys towers support columns the tower falls on the orange block and explodes

stiveland: my work here is done ( warps away )

Dan : they can't all be dead can they?


TO BE CONTIUED!
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PostSubject: Re: Story of Commander Dietz   Mon Oct 26, 2009 2:47 pm

ch 9 up to date

60 earth years later


dietz: ( opens eyes ) arrrrrrrrrrrgh! ( breaks cryo pod ) where am i !


dan: calm down!

dietz: what happened? where's orange block?

dan: they are dead and it has been 60 earthean years since pegisi delphi 4

dietz: 60?!

dan: yes, also remember fuse?

dietz: the flood we messed with all those years ago?

dan: yes, he has attacked an earth.

dietz: well i always wanted to go to an earth

dan: i'll see what HIGH COMMAND says.

dietz: ok

dan: also your rank know is meta commander

dietz: thank you sir

dan your welcome.


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PostSubject: Re: Story of Commander Dietz   Mon Oct 26, 2009 3:23 pm

ch 10

hard drop

dan: ok dietz get in the pod

dietz: (gets in pod) kinda tight

dan: it was made for humans

dan to flight co: ok we are ready to drop

flight co: dropping!

pod drops

pod hits ground

dietz: ( gets out of the pod) well it looks like i'm off course ( picks up sign ) what's this say? ( reads sign ) fayet hmm ther's nothing in he archives about this ( sets sign in teloporter) anylaze this guys.

dietz: well what do i'm stranded in the middle of now where and no one is here, wait what is that? ( pulls out sniper) hmmm well it looks like a demon and well it's attacking the bad guys so i guess he's good.

later

dietz: so i have multiple signitureso of M.E. around these targets maybe i could use them as allies.

TO BE CONTIUED

note: this is almost current and i might make a cross over so if you get a pm you can decline or become apart of this.
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PostSubject: Re: Story of Commander Dietz   Fri Nov 06, 2009 6:23 am

meanwhile back on tetram.....


dan: THIS IS THE DAYT TETRAM BECOMES OURS AGAIN NO DALECK WILL STAND IN OUR WAY!

marines : oora!

dan: TODAY THE DALECKS WILL GET EXTERMINATED!

*hatch opens

dan: CHARGE!

the people of tetram charge from their hiding places and obliterate all daleck resistance on the planet, and dan shouts to retreating daleck star ships

dan: MARK THIS DAY DALECKS FOR THIS IS DAY WE WIN!

the clouds open and the first real sunlight strikes thye battle field

dan: it's been years since i've seen that sight Smile

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PostSubject: Re: Story of Commander Dietz   Fri Nov 13, 2009 11:13 pm

awesome chapter maybe you could make them longer lol! if you want to tho lol!
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PostSubject: Re: Story of Commander Dietz   Wed Nov 25, 2009 9:16 am

ch11 the assault on scorrow.................... or is it? ( part one )


dietz( on a ship): there's scorrow the darleck homeworld

dan: all ships prepare bombard ment!

shipmaster: yes sir!

all silo doors open on all ships and prepare to fire KRONOS class nukes

dan: fire!

nukes detach and hit the planet

dietz: alright no doubt they heard us get to the surface now!

darleck commander: when they land they won't know what happened
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PostSubject: Re: Story of Commander Dietz   Thu Jan 14, 2010 2:57 pm

the attack on skaro part 2

in the midst of all the fighting a small blue box appears behind me as someone opens the door i am blasted in by artillary when i stand up i point my gun at the immposible person in front of me


dietz: WHO ARE YOU!

doctor: the doctor

dietz: but your dead you died in the last battle in the dark war, what is your spiecies

doctor: time lord

dietz: rencarnated, well better get to my ship doctor

doctor: why?

dietz: this is skaro

doctor: and the darlecks

dietz: right outside

doctor: but the shields aren't up!

DARLECK: EXTEMINATE!

dietz: crap
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PostSubject: Re: Story of Commander Dietz   Thu Feb 04, 2010 4:41 pm

the attack on skaro final part

doctor: emergency time shift activated

dietz: whoa!

the doctor and dietz are thrown back in time to a day every one knows

dietz: where are we?

doctor: where ever we are we landed in a place with a lot of paranormals

dietz: crap i know where we are

doctor: where

dietz: Oriton the day fuse attacked

doctor: but we can't leave the TARDIS is offline

dietz: then grab a gun it's gonna get hot

doctor: but i don't carry a gun

dietz: well then keep your head down

dietz gets out of the TARDIS and bumps into someone familar

dietz: oh sorry, the name's dietz

???: oh hello i'm alice calmer

dietz: what?!

alice: i'm alice calmer

dietz: i'm so sorry what's coming , God save you

dietz quikly sprints to his future house as the sky starts to turn green

doctor: where are you going?

dietz: in my house is a caveran that leads to a HALO ring piece under the city plus my ship is under there, just stay in the TARDIS

dietz gets to the halo piece locates the index and puts it in his jacket when he returns to the TARDIS he powers it up and puts in the cordinatesas the Tardis leaves the ground dietz drops the index and tries to grab it while it plumets to earth, and lands in nall calmer's back pack

doctor: what about the index?

dietz: it's in a safe place

doctor: and we're off

the TARDIS goes off course and lands on the archemides after the battle on skaro

dan: where the heck have you been

dietz: earth, did we win

dan: yes it turns out this isn't skaro it's dakleck

dietz: a decoy

dan: yeah, who's your friend?

dietz: the doctor

dan: well then come on doctor your now apart of the allaince

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PostSubject: Re: Story of Commander Dietz   Wed Mar 10, 2010 3:54 pm

ch 13

a great battle and the death of a legend

it began as any other day, but by the time it ended an inconceble amout of lives had been taken, we had been working on an expirimental weapons system called project METASIS. this weapon was designed to take out darleck hyper carriers, (a new enemy ship that was annialateing alies) once it was finished some how the darlecks found oout and sent a HUGE invasion fleet
any small battlefield fleet in the way was crushed in minutes, they immeditly destroied most of our space defenses and went ground side. i was waiting next to the line ( the line was barrier to keep enemy troops out of METASIS) when they decesended from the skies. the enmy ships opened up with everything they had, and in seconds trillions died then they rushed us, with horrors, biomechinized abominations ran to the line slautering everything in thier path bodies were thrown against the chrome barricades we had set up, the air filled with the smell of rotting flesh and death, i opened fire with a tri-hole napalm lancher and burned them down. one by one they fell. after the initial wave was annialiated, the ships started glassing the near by sectors. the air quickly reached at least 150 degrees, i started sweting uncontrolably then i finally lost it. i threw down my gun and pulled out my swords and started bringing down the fleet but there were just to many, as i was chopping up a destroyer a plasma shell from a GOD OF WAR hit me in the back and i started to fall, as i fell the enemy ships scored hits on me all over when i hit the ground he was there to save me, Commander Gustav, he's a year older than i and we're the same rank, only he deals with black ops, he pulled me to safety when a ship landed and a 2 people came out. william, and stiveland. they shot commander gustav in the chest and he fell backwards. they stepped over us and went into a bunker. i could here the screams of men and women as they were murdered. Gusttav ran in there and rigged something, i couldn't tell what it was, but i found out in a few minutes. i could hear him and william in a shouting match, but this is all i remember


Gustav: you won't get away!

william: yes i will and i'll kill you or corupte you

Gustav: how?

william: don't play stupid this place houses black point stars, the evilest things in the omniverse, even evilier than me

Gustav: NO!

that's when the facility went bang i saw william and stiveland thrown out and i knew the stars were destroied, their ship warped away and then a loud hum started. it was from METASIS. all our ships fled from the sky,and the sky turned blue again, a massive EMP went off and the darleck ships started falling, then i saw commander dan appear and use all the strength he had in him and destroy all the ships before they hit the ground, then i blacked out. when i awoke i found my self in another med bay with a bunch of other guys. i went outside to see the service for commander gustav. a tear formed and hit the ground i will never forget him he was like a brother to me


in honor of Don the barber 9/26/09
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PostSubject: Re: Story of Commander Dietz   Sat Apr 10, 2010 12:34 pm

ch 14 this is for keeps


i awake in my bed after a bad night, i had another nightmare about stiveland this time idreamed that he killed my wife, i looked beside me ad she was sleeping soundly, i smiled and got up it was 5:00 A.M. and time for me to get up, she didn't need to wake up until 8. i took a shower, put my combat suit on and telported up to the supercarrier Damecles.

Dietz: alright then what do we have to do today

ensign: just some radar and scouting in our outer belt

Dietz: sounds easy enough

the engines power up and the ship moves toward the outer belt of our system, we sit there for hours watching the rada, scouting, and playing astroid destroyer with the ship guns, after about 12 hours we get a hit on the radar

Radar watcher: sir we have a contact on the outer rim

Dietz: bring the radar up full screen please

RW: yes sir.

the radar comes up and instead of seeing 1 contact i see thousands

Dietz: is this true?!

RW: actually every dot represents at least one hundred thousand enemy ships

Dietz: oh my god, SOUND THE ALARM GET THE BATTLEFIELD READY!

we instantly send out a Meta alarm that contacts every indidvidual soldier on the Battlefield the Damecles jumps to te Battlefield and we can already see ships being prepared, then Commander Dan contacts us

Dan: Dietz i want you on the ground Now Admiral hart is coming to coand your ship, i want every muliformer i can get down here

Dietz: YES SIR!

i prepare myself for the jump to the ground since al ark fighter are already scrambled, i put on my pack they open the hatch and i jump, i know what your thinking and yes i'm in space and alive that's just how powerful my race is, i enter Battlefield airspace and i start to slow down i touch the ground softly right next to Commander Dan

Dietz: so what is this?

Dan: this one is for keeps

Dietz: oh no...............


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PostSubject: Re: Story of Commander Dietz   Sat Apr 10, 2010 1:07 pm

great chapter
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PostSubject: Re: Story of Commander Dietz   Sat Apr 10, 2010 2:34 pm

thanks the next few chapters will be about the epic fight they will have
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PostSubject: Re: Story of Commander Dietz   Sun Apr 11, 2010 6:08 pm

ch 15 INCOMING!!!!!!!!!!!!

they came in force hey did our ships fought valiantly but they out numbered us once they broke through they started laying waste to every thing insight, i was moved to fort isanberg, to keep the Battlefield from being flanked. the Hierachy attacked there with meta walkers, firing intense beams of extremly radiated plasma they were a serios threat to the isanberg, i was in command of all the ground forces so i moved up the heavy moble artillery pieces on Scanvan ridge, the torn the walkers apart i watched as they came the flood had returned. i immeditly moved all exposed troops inside the fort to hold the ground. once the flood had appeared the darlecks started glassing the mountain, but the Stationary MAC platforms took them out before they had a chance to fire on isanberg. we mopped up the flood and started to concentrate all fire on the darlecks, but then a Hyper Carrier came out of slipspace above us, and dropped a fusion bomb, we left the fort as fast as we could i telported everyone i could until i colasped from exashtion and then when i was back at the battlefield it went off and isanberg was destoyed, Cdr. dan told me that the fight had moved to the mean streets of the icecap. so i was escorted there via ark fighter we touched down in the thick of it. as my escort departed it was shot down and started falling to my troops

Dietz: GET YOUR HEADS DOWN!

we all scuttled to neaby buildings as the escort crashed on the street, we regrouped near the crash site when the marine next me got his head blown off

Dietz: SNIPERS ON THE ROOF TOPS TAKE'EM OUT!

I grabbed the nearest gun i could find and started shooting wave after wave of enemies cam, from Abominations To Zacracks, then the alarm went off and it said full house, which means that every enemy the battlefield had ever faced was here now and was attacking us, suddenly a scarab came through the street and stopped, i was relieved since the covanant is our allies, but i saw flood matter on it, one of my men saw it and asked

marine: sir is that ours?

dietz: no..........

it fired right at us and the street exploded i felt my body thrown against the ground i picked my self up and ran to the nearest building i could hear all the men and women scream as they were infected, i kneeled on the ground and started praying for my life then i smacked myself in the face and told myself you are commander dietz, you can do this, i got up and summoned all my power and destoryed every thing i saw. iwent on a rampage destroying all enemies in sight. then i got a full retreat order from commander dan. i telported to where he was

dietz: is it over

dan: i'm afraid it has just begun
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PostSubject: Re: Story of Commander Dietz   Sat Apr 17, 2010 9:30 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Story of Commander Dietz   Sun Apr 18, 2010 1:05 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Story of Commander Dietz   Sun Apr 18, 2010 2:32 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Story of Commander Dietz   Tue Nov 02, 2010 8:47 pm

Alright here's a rundown of the story so far, this battle was won and a much larger fleet called the Borsen fleet came and almost wiped us out, we drove them off now we're facing the largest fleet we've ever seen i write the next chapter when my arm is better ( hurt it in wrestling ) until then i'll update you if the story changes
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Commander Dietz
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Join date : 2009-10-07
Age : 20
Location : WORLD: TETRAM, CONTINENT: GELTON, COUNTRY: RITOS, CITY: BATTLEFIELD

PostSubject: Re: Story of Commander Dietz   Wed Nov 03, 2010 8:33 pm

ch 21 ( lots of fighting in between remember )

the fight for tetram has taken it's toll Quintillions of brave fighters for the Battlefield rebulic have been lost and pportions of tetram have been glassed and burned the planet is dying a cruel and agonizing death and the multiformers have had enough
it's time to end this fight. On the Tetram, Dan has assembled the largest gathering of multiformers since the Dark War, and they're all ready to strike back

Dan: TODAY IS A HISTORIC DAY INDEED!

Multiformer populace: TODAY IS TTHE DAY WHERE WE BREAK WILLIAM'S GRIP ON OUR HOMELAND!

Dan: REMEMBER WE MAY BE STONG APART BUT WHEN WE ARE TOGETHER ARE STRENGTH IS UNPARALLELED!

Multiformer populace: NOW WE SHALL ALL RAISE OUR SWORDS AS ONE AND RID THE SCURG FROM EXISTANCE!

Dan and all other multiformers rise up and fly toward space ready for the fight as they go they pass the remenents of the Home Fleet and they are reminded why they must always fight. As they near the enemy Blockade panic sets in for the enemy

Shipmaster: Enemy multiformers inbound! prepare for jump

Navigater: Warp drive offline!

Shipmaster: Brace for impa---

All the multiformer collide with all enemy space vessels and instanly obliterate them, they zig-zag around all of Tetroinian space wiping out all restisance once the skys are clear the suns strike tetram again revealing it's mortal wounds, but then once again the multiformers turn back to use thier ultimate power to give and restore life. they point their hands in unison and blast the planet with their energy slowly but surely the glassed sections of the planet reform the oceans brim with life and green replace the black and brown that had covered Tetram. once all of the planet is repaired and healed the Multiformers colapse having used all their might

3 Days later

Dietz: ugh my head... what happened?

Dan: we did repeled the enemy from tetram and healed the planet

Dietz: and all i had to drink that day was Decaf?!

Dan: Told'ja you should drank Expresso

(Note: i have redacted the earlier section about what caffine does to multiformers)


TO BE CONTINUED!!
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